Hmmmm
Nice graphics, poser I'm assuming. You have some excellent ideas, and I wanna vote reasonably high on this so you continue, but ideas for your next one...
Don't use crappy sound, it's ruining a potentially good movie. The motorcycle and beeping sounds almost made me throw my speakers out the window. Go to Flashkit.com or to Newgrounds Sound Portal.
Next, don't use so much text,I thought it was pretty interesting but I know lots of people that are in it for the eye-candy and couldn't care less about the story.
With that said. Good job, and keep up the work, I hope to see more from you!
Peace out